Thread: A Chertuga Tragedy [short story]

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Old 03-09-2005, 07:32 PM

Like everyone's said, some slight errors, but overall a really nice story. A thing you would want to fix though is you called "the girl of his dreams" Alison, and then Angelica, choose 1 name . And like kno` said, the ending just kinda ended, it wansn't too smooth. But I think its pretty good, good job
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