I dont really care or expect any high ratings from you guys. All i know is i put more emotion and feeling into this piece than i have in anything else and i feel like its perfect. To me. And thats all that matters right now.

Some of the phrases in it:

RICH IN SOUL BUT FUCKED WITH FEAR

SOULESS AT THE TIME OF MY MIND

I FEEL WHEN YOU PRICK ME AND I CAN TELL WHEN YOU FUCK ME

I REFUSE TO WEEP OVER UNJUSTIFIABLE BLOOD
SPLIT AT THE HANDS OF JUSTIFIABLE FEAR

I SECOND MY OWN VACANT MINDS UNCONCIOUS DECISION TO FEEL PAIN

WE SING FOR YOU AND SPIT ON YOUR GRAVES

HERB OF THE LAND AND HEART OF THE FUCKED

I LOVE YOU DAD COME HOME SOON

Theres more, but if you really care you can always look at the fuckin picture. Anyway, have at it. Disect me, destroy me, attack me, i will feel never-ending love for this peace not for its artistic qualities but for its emotional outpouring. I feel this to be my greatest achievement. I will miss you dad and stay safe i iraq.

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lol you said "prick"!

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I had the same feeling with "california love". Really put my emotions I was feeling with the music i was listening to and what I feel for this state. I really like that though Akule, some of the text could have been done better but still very good.

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The emotional element is good, although i think it could have been draumatized alot more. I mean, you could have had more emphesis of the war or wahtever, and staying safe. The lighting / dark feature of it really helps the mood. Very nice.

But yes, as deathnoodle stated, the text needs work

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